Visitors from Planet QXZ-92

Title: ‘Visitors from Planet QXZ-92’

Genre: Sci-Fi Comedy

Scene 17: The Arrival

INT. SMALL TOWN DINER - NIGHT

The diner is dimly lit, with a handful of patrons scattered around. A nervous WAITRESS (20’s)

wipes down the counter, glancing out the window every few seconds. Outside, the sky

crackles with strange lights.

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EXT. OUTSIDE DINER - NIGHT

A SPACESHIP descends, hovering just above the parking lot. It's an oddly shaped craft,

resembling a giant interstellar waffle iron. The lights dim, and the ship lands with a light

‘thud.’

INT. SPACESHIP - NIGHT

Inside the spaceship, two ALIEN VISITORS, ZORK and FEEBO, adjust their disguises, a mix of

human clothing awkwardly thrown together. Zork, the leader, is more serious, while Feebo is

the comedic sidekick, with a knack for inappropriate jokes.

ZORK

(serious)

Remember, Feebo, our mission is critical. Earth has the one thing we need to save our planet

from extinction.

FEEBO

(smirking)

Yeah, yeah, I know. The one thing all of Earth’s superior technology couldn’t prepare them

for...

ZORK

(matter-of-factly)

Correct. We need Earth’s... ‘bacon grease’.

FEEBO

(grinning)

Who knew that pig fat would be the key to interstellar travel? And to think they just pour it

down the drain!

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INT. SMALL TOWN DINER - NIGHT

The door chimes as Zork and Feebo enter, their human disguises slightly askew. The

Waitress looks up, a forced smile on her face.

WAITRESS

(slightly nervous)

Uh, table for two?

ZORK

(serious)

We require... the grease. ‘Bacon grease.’ The fate of our world depends on it.

WAITRESS

(confused)

The what now?

FEEBO

(whispering)

Smooth, Zork, real smooth.

ZORK

(clears throat)

We would like to order... bacon. ‘A lot’ of bacon. And keep the grease.

The Waitress, bewildered but unfazed by the strange request, nods and heads to the

kitchen.

FEEBO

(grinning)

I’ve got a bad feeling about this... you know, when we get back, we're definitely gonna be the

ones with intergalactic indigestion.

ZORK

(firm)

We must stay focused, Feebo. Without that bacon grease, our engines won’t generate

enough power to escape Earth’s gravitational pull.

FEEBO

(whispering)

But why bacon grease? I mean, couldn't it be something cool like nacho cheese?

ZORK

(deadpan)

Because our engines require a high-density lipid compound with a precise melting point.

Bacon grease is perfect. Scientifically sound and... delicious.

FEEBO

(grinning)

Sure, but do you know how hard it is to explain a mission like this back home? ‘Hey, Mom,

Dad, I’m off to Earth to pick up some pig fat!’ Real conversation starter.

ZORK

(sighs)

Focus, Feebo. We’re here to save our planet, not to start a cooking show.

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INT. KITCHEN - NIGHT

The Cook in the back of the kitchen flips bacon on the griddle. He looks over at the grease

collecting in the pan and starts pouring it into a container.

WAITRESS

(to Cook)

You ever have someone ask for... just the grease?

COOK

(scoffing)

Nah, but hey, maybe they’re starting a new trend. Grease is the word, right?

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INT. SMALL TOWN DINER - NIGHT

The Waitress returns with a large plate of bacon and a separate container of grease. She

sets it on the table, giving them a wary look.

WAITRESS

Here you go. Enjoy... I guess?

ZORK

(serious, nodding)

Your contribution to interstellar diplomacy will not be forgotten.

FEEBO

(winks)

And neither will the heartburn.

WAITRESS

(sighing, mutters)

I need a vacation.

ZORK

(to Feebo, whispering)

Secure the grease. We must return to the ship at once.

FEEBO

(grinning)

I’ve got it, Zork. This mission just got a whole lot tastier.

They grab the bacon and grease, leaving the Waitress puzzled and slightly amused.

FADE OUT.

1. Dialogue Complexity: The dialogue was enhanced to balance humor with scientific plausibility, making the conversation between Zork and Feebo both funny and credible. The concept of using bacon grease as a vital component for their spaceship's engines introduces a unique twist.

2. Comedic Timing: The comedic elements were carefully placed to ensure they flowed naturally within the scene. Feebo’s lighthearted remarks serve as a counterbalance to Zork’s serious demeanor, creating a dynamic interaction between the characters.

3. Scientific Accuracy: The explanation of why bacon grease is essential for their engines was added to make the premise more believable, while still maintaining a comedic tone. This notonly grounds the story in a form of reality but also adds depth to the characters' mission.

4. Clarity and Consistency: The scene was reviewed for clarity and consistency in tone,ensuring that the humor did not overshadow the narrative. The characters’ motivations and the plot’s direction were made clear, maintaining the audience’s engagement.

5. Formatting and Pacing: Proper screenplay formatting was adhered to, and the pacing of the scene was adjusted to allow for comedic beats to land effectively without disrupting the flow of the narrative.