Comprehensive Edit of a Fantasy TV Pilot Manuscript

This writer came to me with the type of project I receive most often- a fiction manuscript, except this one was a screenplay for a TV pilot. I had never worked on a screenplay before, but just most manuscripts for novels the focus was on line editing, copy editing, as well as review and critique in a few small areas. The writer had already developed the plot and characters, but needed help with consistency, line editing, and grammar, and wanted an expert eye on the book before moving forward with the pilot.

Just an example of one page of the manuscript after editing was completed.