I have worked with several romance authors to polish their prose, improve clarity, correct typos and grammar gaffes, and eliminate inconsistencies. Along the way, I include explanations and tips and tricks so that future books will also benefit, and I highlight scenes and sentences that illustrate the writers' strengths—things I loved that I think readers will too. Among the things I’ve fixed/pointed out:
• The translucent glass wall through which an assistant watches her boss (transparent)
• A character whose name is sometimes Ava, sometimes Ana
• Decadent deserts (desserts)
• Chapter 9 … twice
• The correct uses of em dashes and en dashes
• Unnecessary dialogue tags
• Comma splices
• Repeated words or sentence structures
• Overuse of italics for emphasis
• Formatting inconsistencies
• Impossible physical feats
• Close-but-no-cigar words (orgasm/organism, condensation/condescension)
• Too much telling rather than showing
• Dangling/misplaced modifiers
• A timeline that doesn’t add up
• Incorrect homophones (rein/reign/rain)
• Tense and POV shifts
