Feedback on a Children's Book

This is an example of feedback given on a project. This was an order received on Fiverr. I turned this around within the day, and my client was very happy.

Good Afternoon!

I enjoyed this so much! Absolutely delightful, first off I really liked the illustrations. The bright colors and use of textures are very engaging and visually stimulating, which is always great for a children’s book! She did an amazing job.

I really enjoyed the blend of numbers and science facts throughout the book, as the two tend to go hand in hand quite often! I think it is a great way to help conceptualize large numbers to a small child who’s just starting to learn. I think big numbers can seem a bit ambiguous to a little kid, so having a real world example that they could then see for themself to some degree is a great approach. (I actually didn’t know the fact about eels being able to light up five light bulbs!)

The progression from each biome felt very natural, and is a great way to showcase the different environments that are out there! Biology was one of my favorite parts of my science classes growing up so I felt this was worth noting.

The chart at the end using sand as a way to showcase the magnitude of these massive, hard to imagine numbers was really interesting to me. I would like to imagine someone could use this book alongside one of those science kits that come with sand as a hands-on visual aid as well and could make for some fun projects and demonstrations. The pages with definitions is a nice addition as well, and easy to understand.

Just a couple things of note, granted this may borderline on proofreading, so take it with a grain of salt if you like! (or sand, rather!)  There was one typo I noticed on the first Number Note header. Also, this might be more of a personal taste, but I think some more exclamation marks on the more action heavy pages might be good to add a little extra energy to the story portion of the book. The examples that come to mind first being the thunderstorm cloud. (for example, “The lightning flashed and thunder BOOMED!”) or when Pebbles gets picked up by the eagle (…”Pebbles cried!”) That punctuation can also help influence the way it could be read out loud as well, thus making it more engaging to a group of small kids listening to the story. They’re invested, and the science and number facts suddenly have that much more weight and potential impact. This is THE biggest number after all!

The lead up to the concept of infinity was also interesting, and a good way to approach something like a never ending number. I remember trying to wrap my head around that one when I was younger!

Overall I really enjoyed this. It’s super cute, I think it's great for your target age range and conveys its information in a clear and interesting way. I love the educational approach, its all very visually stimulating, and I could easily see this on the bookshelf of 1st-4th grade science and math classes.

I would be happy to answer any followup questions you may have!