Cut the hidden costs bleeding your bank account dry is such a strong headline for this. The Snip wordmark looks sharp on that dark background, and building it in React means you can ship the real thing, not just the mockup.
You don’t need huge headlines or long explanations. You need the right image + short headline + clear offer.
For the first version, we worked on the branding, the image and the copy together, so at first glance it’s clear: this is a makeup course, and here’s what you’ll get.
The second version is still beautiful and still feels like beauty. But what are you actually getting? A makeup course? Products? A store? That’s the problem with a Hero that looks good but isn’t thought through.
Your first screen doesn’t need to say everything. It just needs to say the right thing.